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This is a story about two girls timetraveling. They are confused They don't know what to do.
This is a story about two girls timetraveling. They are confused They don't know what to do.
"Arghhhhhhhhhhhhhhh"
A loud noise from Lisa echoed in the school hallway.
A sweet girl with lovely braids Emily came to Lisa and hissed.
" Isn't your voice is to loud?"
"Oh I ...I... i... JUST look at this!!!!" Lisa pushed a piece of paper to Emily hands.
(The spelling bee contest results)
1st Sam Baislee
2nd Lisa Smith
3rd Jennifer Dutchman
" Oh it will be ok.. I think..." whispered Emily.
" No it is not "
"Yes it is"
"no"
"Yes"
"No"
"Yes"
"You can't understand. Look who got first place... Sam Baislee!!!!!!!!!"
"Well.... I - a rock! How pretty it is!"
"Yeah right.. Hey give me that rock!!!!!!!"shouted Lisa
"Hey Lisa! Isn't that to loud? here..." hissed Emily as she was blurring her words.
" I wish Sam Baislee was cursed and I want to go to the future what will happen to him.Here."
Emily was confused. She thought Lisa was being stupid.
Suddenly water was all over Emily and Lisa. The water was swirling and roaring.
"What is happeningggggggggggg!!!!!!!!!!"
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" Oh it will be ok.. I think..." whispered Emily.
" No it is not "
"Yes it is"
"no"
"Yes"
"No"
"Yes"
"You can't understand. Look who got first place... Sam Baislee!!!!!!!!!"
"Well.... I - a rock! How pretty it is!"
"Yeah right.. Hey give me that rock!!!!!!!"shouted Lisa
"Hey Lisa! Isn't that to loud? here..." hissed Emily as she was blurring her words.
" I wish Sam Baislee was cursed and I want to go to the future what will happen to him.Here."
Emily was confused. She thought Lisa was being stupid.
Suddenly water was all over Emily and Lisa. The water was swirling and roaring.
"What is happeningggggggggggg!!!!!!!!!!"
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All three endings are so sad :( Poor Emily and Lisa... Next time be sure to check your spelling. Also, try to be more specific. You could have explained what Emily and Lisa thought. Rather than writing the story through dialogue, you can write down more explanations on the setting, emotions, and events.
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